Monday, September 3, 2012

"Moon" (September Haiku, Day Four)



It’s summer still.  Fall
Will lower the bridge over
Her castle’s moat.  Wait.

Color in her cheeks,
She’ll let you in her castle,
When golden leaves fall.

When loneliness rings,
She’ll wrap you in reds and golds,
Hand you a scepter.

She’ll make you her king,
You’ll be her Sun and her Moon,
She will bow to you.

To be continued...

Live for the Love of it,
The Happy Amateur 

29 comments:

  1. woah please her she will please you.. great deal!

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    1. I'm not sure it was intended to be that steamy, but I can live with that :-)

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  2. You are indeed creating lovley haiku for her..thanks...

    RS:)

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    1. I'm SO glad :-) I'll try to keep the momentum going.

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  4. I'm getting the idea now - good luck for the rest of the month!

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  5. Really liking this, afraid I will fall in and out of humor :)

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  6. Awesome! You're story is unfolding ... very well done.

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  7. "You’ll be her Sun and her Moon" I like that. Things are happening here :-)

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  8. I love the personification of fall. There are some beautiful images here.

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  9. Lovely weaving of images in your haiku as the story unfolds ... :)

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  10. ah ! the story you are creating .. interesting :)

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  11. An unfolding story -- quite a challenge you've set for yourself. Look forward to the next "chapter"!
    September Heights - Choreographing Stars

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  12. Nimue, Becca - thank you for the encouragement :-)

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  13. It gets better and more suspenseful. Great!

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  14. A story in haiku.. interesting :) Like it!

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  15. Oh, I see how it goes! It's magnificent. Will make sure I don't miss any other! Great project :-)
    Best, M.

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    1. Thank you, Mariya, so nice to see you here :-)

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