Wednesday, March 14, 2012

"Bloom" (poem)

A visual prompt from We Write Poems:



Like daffodils this year, she bloomed early,

Defying the cold, that still lingered.

The frost caught her unawares,

She tasted the bitterness

Of the morning chill, and

Emerged alive, but 

The cool petals

Of her lips

Lost their

Youth.





Live for the Love of it,
The Happy Amateur

12 comments:

  1. An interesting interpretation, and the last line so true!

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    1. Thank you, Viv. I didn't really know what to do with this prompt until I saw daffodils "shocked" by an overnight frost. They didn't die, they made a comeback, but never looked the same.

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  2. I love love love that first line! I think it should be a future prompt.

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  3. The last line stole my breath!!! BTW, I just tagged you. You IT!
    You don't have to play, but you may:) See guidelines here.http://anotherporch.blogspot.com/2012/03/blogger-tag.html

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    1. Thank you, Janet!
      Will be over shortly to see what it's about :-)

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  4. I like how you've captured the "fading out" of the photo transitions in your imagery!

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  5. Loads of truth in the last line, Sasha.

    Pamela

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  6. I like this poem much. It is sort of like a big giant haiku to me, the way it sets a scene, a landscape of being, then shifts and relates that wonderful powerful ending, making the meaning more. I'm not too much on "forms" of any sort, but this subtractive progression is so nicely done and really enhances what the poem has to say. All in all, very nice!

    And I agree with mareymercy about that line. Please remind me later for a future WWP prompt!

    neil

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    1. Neil, thank you very much for your words.
      I'd be honored if a line from this poem could become a future prompt.

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